Looking for folks to trade a little proofreading. I will read your book and give the best feedback I can on your document. I am not an editor, consider this more like a playtest for an enthusiast seeing your book. I do read/love a lot of rulebooks and game. I can tell you what does/doesn’t make sense to me. I can tell you what spelling/grammar mistakes I notice. I can tell you if I see any rules contradictions. If you want I can also give design feedback/impressions, but I was thinking more of a editing pass, at least for what I would like in return.

Specifically, I’m looking for feedback on clarity of my rulebook. Awkward sentences, poor grammar, unclear rules. My rulebook is 20,847 words. So if you have something for me to proofread it would cool to exchange. I feel like this is the only part of my book I cannot do without a 2nd person.

You can reply here or move to DM for specifics, and if you would like to see the gamepage to decide if you are interested first: https://infantofatocha.itch.io/chronomutants

  • tyrzaphir
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    1 year ago

    I took a brief glance at your game and it seems really fun and wacky! I’d be happy to review it over the next couple days and provide some feedback. If you would like to do the same for me, you can find my game here: www.volitionrpg.com

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      1 year ago

      Sorry for the late reply, I’m new to Lemmy and I guess I don’t have notifications set up correctly. I have been getting a bunch of hits from reddit, and a couple from here, but your game is next on my list. Your link doesn’t like my script block, but I think I got it to load finally.