• yngmnwntr@lemmy.ml
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    4 days ago

    It’s starts cloudy and when the fight ends it begins to snow. As the protagonist monolgues he and the cooling corpse of his rival bleed out in the accumulating snow. Bam no footprints, two slowly spreading blood pools, monologue, fade to white.

    • Hemingways_Shotgun@lemmy.ca
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      I’d say no dialogue. Tell the story visually.

      This man has been protecting a young kid from afar. The kid’s never met him, but this man has spent the last few months keeping the bad people away from him and it’s taken a very obvious toll on his body. Finally, in the final confrontation, he’s mortally wounded and bleeding out after killing the “main” antagonist. He goes to his grave stoically, with no one ever knowing what he sacrificed.